Sunday, January 14, 2007

Creative Writing: Fog and Stillness

The nice thing about forcing myself to put some of my own writing here each week is that it gives me a chance to edit things I'd written before. The paragraph below, for instance, said virtually the same thing yesterday, but was made up of almost entirely different words. Now I wish I had kept the "before" version to show the difference.
The fog is a familiar visitor on the Maine coast. It can move like a quick intruder, venturing in at the front window, drifting across the house and out the back, leaving the air and surfaces cool and clammy from its damp fingerprints. Other times, the fog sits, heavy and still, infusing the entire landscape with moisture and a weighty silence. In a heavy fog the world grows so quiet around you, so motionless and almost breathless, you might come to believe you're the only living creature left on Earth.

3 comments:

Douglas said...

When I saw "infuses," I thought of a coffee shop or Jamba Juice, where they ask if you want an infusion of something or other.

Nancy said...

Funny! Yeah, I'm not convinced I've got the right word there.

Speaking of coffee, any word on the Starbuck's Challenge?

runart said...

On top of the mountain in rural central New York yesterday we were treated to a heavy fog causing a spidery ice to form on every surface - a delicate and still landscape instead of a heavy coastal one. A day to stay snuggled by the fire....
Was just thinking about the Starbucks challenge myself and wondering if there will be one?