Sunday, November 19, 2006

Creative Writing: Shower at Night

Here's a bit of description I created that hasn't found a home yet.
She stepped out onto the deck for one last look at the cove before bed. The clouds had gathered and now obscured the moon. It took a moment for her eyes to adjust to the darkness before her, and during that moment she heard a sound like steady rain all around. She felt no drops, but held out her palm for several seconds just to be sure. Then as the water and the trees and the rocky shore took shape in front of her, she saw thousands of dry autumn leaves dancing through the dark night, landing on the rocks and flying against the house like so many raindrops.

7 comments:

featherbee said...

Oh, very nice. Makes me wonder what the rest of the story might be about!

featherbee said...

Wanted to add, I can definitely visualize this scene, excellent description.

Nancy said...

Thanks featherbee!

And if only I knew what the rest of the story was about... Ugh.

Erin said...

Wow, that's really great! Like Featherbee said, it was very easy to imagine.

Stidmama said...

pretty pretty! *dancing around trying to touch the leaves*

this is gorgeous, and I can hardly wait to see what you do with it.

runart said...

WOW.

Nancy said...

Erin, Stidmama, Runart... thanks so much! I hope you have the chance to enjoy the warmth and love of family and friends this week! Happy Thanksgiving!